My pen it spits at you
All the things you
Run away from
Including the all but forgotten truth
My pen it spits at you
Venomous the ink
As you smear it across your face
With your every futile
Attempt to wipe it off
My pen it spits at you
Hands forever stained
Growing darker every day
Frightened by facts
You cannot face
My pen it spits at you
Your black roses
Long ago laid in boxes
Wrapped up like gifts
But were never to be given
My pen it spits at you
All that you swore to yourself
Was too well hidden
To ever be discovered
By anyone least of all yourself
My pen it spits at you
Or does it constantly spray
Aimed at reaching the many like a sprinkler
And you are the child
That can never get enough
Long after the street lights illuminate
You continue to play
(Thanks for reading)
This is not my usual style. I hope you enjoyed it.
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what a captivating first line!
Thank you Marit
I like that you are stepping out of your normal voice and it works for me. I enjoyed it very much.
Thank you
love it.
your verbs are strikingly powerful.
Thank you so much
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This is uncomfortable and moving… makes me want to never piss off a poet, haha! Great write.
lol that’s awesome thanks….
Damn that pen drooled on me with it’s spit, nasty..haha…love the verse, the first line was amazing.
nice
Nice work . . . I think I have one of those pens and sometimes while writing I feel that little nudge at things I feel are well hidden.
I believe you
I need to get me one of these spitting pens! It could help me deal with a few ex-friends… LOL. Awesomely powerful words.
Thank you!
dude…so want to hear this one at an open mic…strong lines and great visuals…smear that ink…great use of emotion…
Thanks man That is a really cool thing to say!
Strong write! I want to be the the spitter not the spittee—
lol thanks
Totally enjoyed this. I think for me, this is one of your best pieces…Thanks for sharing
Wow I am surprised at how this was received. But I am very glad you do. Thank you.
Great title and re-occuring first line of each stanza. This is a very direct, well implemented poem that clearly and effectively communicates. Excellent!
Thank you I appreciate it.
I enjoyed this…and there is still your style within this, although a variant indeed. The image of the “pen spitting” really capturing. Hope you are well sweet brother ~ Rose
Thank you Rose. Hope you are good too.
Clear and powerful. No unnecessary words. Fierceness right down the page!
Well done.
Thank you Gay
I came via Gooseberry Garden, and I’m glad I did. This is simple (seemingly) and quite powerful. I love the refrain “my pen spits at you”. At the end, one wonders who “you” truly is.
Thank you.
this is amazing. I love the sting countered by the softness of seeing one for who they really are. great job!
Thanks so much.