(Posted to try to explain that while a lot of my posts are unhappy I am not.)
I want to be something
I have never been
True to myself
Not what I am forced to be
An Epic battle
That I must win
No one else can see
The scars that are left
As they show only slightly
On my face
Between the many expressions
From another day
They leave only a trace
Not powerful enough
To outweigh my many joys
And darken the bright colors
Of the foreground figures
In the picture of my life
But strong enough to leave
A grayish hue on the background
Its importance cannot be overlooked
As this is where some of the pieces
That creates the whole of me
Can be found
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I really like all of your work I have read so far…and this one is no different. Very very cool.
Grayish hues are with all of us.
Nicely done.
Genebrother
A stunning read.
Regards j.
we all hide our scars, some with more darkness, some with sunshine.
well written, a nice read.
A deep and moving piece… love the raw honesty and how it shows the grey hues sprinkling flavor across the joys of every day. It is the grey hues that bring such deep meaning to the sunshine.
Very nice! Reminds me of one of my own pieces:
Sincere, honest introspection. Thank you for sharing!
Yes, I loved those first four lines.. Its very beautiful, and honest! 🙂
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I can’t disagree with a word you convey in this epic poem. Loved it.
the questioning part is important, and that muse rarely speaks joyfully. Keep it up, my friend!
Very good poem. You write from the heart.
moving and true to your heart
That’s a nice gesture. It often happens that we elaborate our understanding of sadness so much, that it seems like we are sad. Nice poem to emphasize your joy.
I wish you could see me smiling. I really enjoyed reading this. I love the word grayish, for what it’s worth, btw.
I enjoyed this MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
very true and very raw
Thank you everyone for the awesome comments. because of some of the comments lately I felt I needed to post this. Thanks again I just wish I started this blog sooner. It brings a great deal of satisfaction.
Great poem, and I like your site. I really relate to your words.
Exceptional dance through your thoughts and desires, nicely written.
Oh god, i love it
show me more color
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Smiling…it is because of your excellent writing capability that we hang on to your every word and assume you are what you write. Happens to all of us sometimes.
This is a very thought-provoking piece. I can also relate to the opening lines.
Very nicely done and thanks for sharing.
well expressed,
thanks for sharing…
😉
Ah….well, regardless of the unhappiness in your poems, they manage to move me like no happy poem does. I think I too am one of those who is “strong enough to leave a grayish hue” and those grayish hues are darn good muses as I know.
a true poet who writes with depth 🙂
Powerful message, and what a striking blog you have! I love the imagery.
Nice piece. Expressions of all aspects of ourselves is true art!
Beautiful poem eloquently and elegantly written. A slight warning from one who knows, to be true to one’s self is often a dangerous thing socially, often people don’t like to see the whole true you. But that said, if you can stand the effects, it is an admirable and amazing goal to strive for.
The Lonely Recluse.
An amazing exploration of your feelings and thoughts!
Poignant piece!!
Beautiful…..Sometimes what is written is not what you are but something more deep and profound than that..
powerful!
Wonderfully expressed. I can very much relate to this poem
I understand completly as I myself write about depressing things more often than not, one reason I do it is because its the emotions in general people are told not to feel or respect, which well its just not good for the soul. Understanding and feeling as though someone else has felt those feelings helps them come to terms with inner insecurities. Happiness is what we make it, and a leason some never learn. Glad you have and have a good one for even scars will heal in time.
Thanks for all the great comments. It makes me glad I posted this. It feels good.
moving, melancholy…..a beauty…. thanks for sharing 🙂
it spoke to me. Lovely!!!
Nicely said. Liked Neuroticfish. Like your set up and artwork as well. I am subscribing.
thank you. I hope you enjoy 🙂
That was a deep introspection. Stay true to yourself!
Being true to yourself is a lofty goal and worth striving for. Excellent poem! Loved it!
Beautiful poem — personal, introspective, but universal at the same time.
exploring our own sorrow or pain is not bad and it doesn’t mean we are unhappy persons… It is being simply true…
honesty is what makes this piece humble…
Great piece! it does seem that often what one puts down is misinterpreted as who they are.
Some days are dark some days are bright
some things go wrong while somethings right
there are always shades of grey and gloom
jus keep smiling and let urself bloom 😀
Very touching. You have managed to involve yourself fully in a lovely flow of thoughts!
Your explanation rings home–I’m sure for others as well, as it often seems easier and more necessary to write the painful pieces than the ones that make our happiness clear. Thanks for sharing this one for the rally!
I enjoyed this piece and totally love your background 🙂
enjoy the rally!
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i really understand this poem, you are helping people pay attention to the one thing everyone ignores
‘And darken the bright colors
Of the foreground figures
In the picture of my life
But strong enough to leave
A grayish hue on the background’ – beautifully written. I can relate, and you put such a serious subject into words so wonderfully.
I love this. I write unhappy poetry sometimes…well, a lot of times. But, in reality I am a very optimistic and happy person, at peace with myself. Still, there has to be an outlet for those darker emotions. This way, they don’t fester inside us and become greater than what they were meant to be.
Well done.
Loved the ending, loved the epic battle. An explanation for something a lot of us struggle with.
Got to know sad, got to know pathos to really know happy – good stuff
I appreciate your sentiments. Just because something appears a certain way, should not define the entirety of that thing/being. You sound balanced and grounded. That is healthy I believe. Exploration and self discovery through examination and questioning is something that everyone should do, something that we should never stop doing. Thank you for sharing this piece. I relate.
Yes! Great — pieces of us all create the whole… not just what we choose to put on our blogs.
Grey hues make us look closer at the colors of our lives. I like your poem. It’s very thought provoking.
Thanks for “Tweeting” me over. I know I’ll be back. Really good and thought-provoking poetry!
thanks.. I get it… lovely piece of writing.
everyone should be who they are and not pretending to be someone they can never be, great poem..
I really like this poem and can really relate to its meaning 🙂
Great piece.Regards j.