I hear the sound
As you slowly
Push down the keys
Ringing in my ears
The music that comes
From your misery
I can feel the pain
In the notes
That you play so hauntingly
To be heard
Your songs plead
Life has a way
Of writing these
They reach out
And touch me
As if I am
In this life
That I do not lead
To connect to us all
They strangely somehow succeed
We are left feeling every drop
That your fingers bleed
blackswanpoetry 
…smells good man, notes play with the synesthesiastical whimsy of a heavy heart finding out wings aren’t necessary to fly…well done…thanks for sharing…
What a beautiful way to acknowledge how we are all connected, how we touch one another.
Music, words and blood – the cream of human connection.
Beautiful.
I wanted to leave a comment, but dheepikaa said it way more profoundly than I could have.
Love the last 3 lines especially.
Description of how passion for words be it in any form, loved it
For some music, others art and writing but all of it poetry!
amazing poem! u write very well…
Unque blog theme and lovely poem. The use of music as metaphor for emtion is a true and powerful one and, though it is sued often, you have played it in so well it is not at all tright. Congratulations! I like it.
agreed( I am a bare tree fan I have discovered)…the poem reminded me of how the ekphrasis of our yearned communications may be the basis of our innermost rhythmic divinities…like the timbling tumbling feel of how this poet’s words draped over an emotional image, wrapping sounds found where his memory meets his pictured frame, his windowed pane, we the readers are let in as if daylight stretching across a living room floor…nameste
Excellent analysis.
Namaste.
Everyone has a connection with everyone else, its just sometimes hard to find do to ideal differences. I love your poem for looking past that. The meataphors you use are truly grand and well stated. This was a great rally post and I look forward to the next rally post 😀
hey, this is nice. I am always glad I come by this blog. Good work.
fantastic
Let me see what I like in this poem: it’s musical, like it says, and it talks about being sensitive to others’ suffering, like you are. People living the lives of others just because they care. “As if I am/In this life/That I do not lead”
Art can make you feel more than your own life. That is what I learn here. Good job!
Great poem! I really enjoyed reading it!
ah, yes! Being able to express yourself so passionately, be it though song, poetry, or any of the creative arts I suppose, is such a gift not only to ourselves, but also to the world. When we can “feel” each other’s emotion, we are truly in-tune with humanity.
Second poem I’ve read today and a second painful eloquent thump – good writing!
i love how it ended… and the theme of the website kinda complemented the poem as well.
If it’s good, music touches the soul eh?
Lovely writing!
I really like this. I hear the sound in your poetry.
Yes indeed! Have you watched a pianist? The telescope of their fingers…how they FEEL. You can see it. No facial expression is necessary. Ebony and Ivory need a third harmony. Blood. You got it right!
Very complimentary to some writer. Excellent work as always.
http://henryclemmonspoet.blogspot.com/2011/06/stray-rays-poets-rally-45.html
Amazing poem.
Thanks for sharing.
thanks everyone for the comments. It is very kind of you all. I am very glad you enjoyed it 🙂
Music makes the life tick.. and you said it well.. Beautiful poetry.
Every song, every note played, every word has a way of making you feel the exact sentiments of its composer. This is beautiful.his very poem is an example as to how the composer’s thoughts and emotions are perfectly conveyed by the composition.We indeed are connected. Bless you.
we all are combind thru the divine love, as we also connect on a level of similarity…words weave from minds that reaches and tells a msg…loved it.
my link:http://mypoetrywriting.blogspot.com/2011/05/his-coming-is-near-upon-shores-off-each.html
great rhythm to this, love it thanks for sharing
😀 wonderful share of poetry treat, love it!
Brilliant. Really captures the deep lying connection between people.
Notes from a pianist finger are sounds from their soul.
Nicely done.
Genebrother
a truly written from the heart poem 🙂
I really enjoyed this. Fast moving structure. Wonderful flow. Killer last few lines. Thanks for sharing this:)
a powerful poem with powerful imagery… I like…
found it fragmented. like the things did not connect. though i must say that sound does preoccupy the lyrical value of the poem.
How well you captured that suspended static state of emotional pain we allow ourselves to collapse into and feel for a while… Beautiful poem! Cindy
Don’t you feel so for the music / poetry of others !!
I do !! And i so loved the feelings in this ..
well penned. . .pain and misery always come together.
“I can feel the pain
In the notes
That you play so hauntingly” I love this part stunning stunning poem
excellent poem !
I love this! It is so deep well done 🙂
Such an array of images and emotion! Well done!
The white and the black keys – the reader sees them move, and listens.
Well drawn.
regards
Harry – Another bare tree fan
Okay, wow! That was a smoothly written piece of work and the ending was simply heartbreaking with your choice of words! Great contribution for the rally!
Amazing !!!
The empathy of pain so well expressed.
Hearing music one day and pain the next day, the same song, same musician, the same me, but not the same circumstances. Or the same musician changing the feeling tone. Connecting on several levels, letting the music into your heart and soul, owning it is awesome. This poem connects at that deep level.
a very evocative poem. you never disappont.
This is amazingly beautiful!!!!
Strange to think that reading words on a computer could elate so many senses… this poem draws you in. well done. xx
Music is indeed an exampled version of our life set and clearly is an answer to our impeding life. It’s a connection, your words tell the whole story, intentions clear as a crystal, nothing is missed, I am hearing it all.
I look up to people who can freely express what they want to rather than keeping it from themselves. 😀
Very wonderful images.
What a gorgeous description… I’m a musician myself and I hope this is what people think when I sing, haha!
So true… Music can make miracles! It can makes us feel anything, from sadness and anger to joy and positiveness. Lovely poem!
It is so awe inspiring..i am just left wondering through your magically weaved words..!! Beautiful!
Alcina
wow. wonderful poetry.
Simply impressive ..
I like the how the emotions flows throughout the poetry
Here’s mine ..
This is amazing. I totally identify with how music can affect us so deeply and personally. Thank you.
wonderfully crafted. a good expression of music’s effects
This is just so friggin’ rich…..
Really striking and beautiful. 🙂
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Well written! Liked this poem 🙂
beautifully written, your words have the power to connect the unrelated and touch a passing reader. Thank you
Interesting poem. 🙂 Sometimes the other person doesn’t express hurt and pain in words, but you hear it and feel it in them in the things they do and the art through which they express.
I loved the music metaphor ! WOnderful poem 🙂
Exquisite, poetry and the feeling of music together. ~MsQ
lobbe the comparison to music. great imagery. love it
amazing way of an expression!
I love the last two lines very strong
Love your neighbour as yourself
A single sentence says it all
For then we know another’s sadness
For then we hurt when the other falls.
When our souls can hear
Those notes so clear
When we can reach out
And quell another’s fears
When happiness
Becomes a conscious choice
Seeing another smile
Makes us rejoice
Then that is heaven
On this earth
And we needn’t wait to die
Like bread that’s leavened
Becomes our breath
All light and winged to fly.
Music always affects me in a deep way. Nice lyrical lines here…
This made me tear up it is hauntingly beautiful
Wow I am glad you told me. It is amazing the power of poetry as it is different for everyone. Thanks for reading.
lovely…
she feels his pain and connects through his music..you have connected yourself with us by this beautiful write…
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A very simple yet complex type of writing. There are just the right amount of words there to give the reader all that they need, instead of having it wordy with unnecessary descriptions. You have shown the reader the picture instead of telling them. Beautiful and breathtaking. Thank you for sharing!
Thanks you so much. Sorry for the late reply . I have not been on here in a long time.