With all the desperation and power
Of a young woman trapped in a love gone bad
She bangs on the door
Such energy when released into the universe
Attempts to reach whatever it can and destroy
He feels the vibration coming through the floor
Sitting on the couch
All sound from the world around him blocked
By the music in his ears
The Sound so thick
It is as he is adrift in it
But still the message received by his feet
Is all too clear
Ignoring the pleas that go unheard
But that are easily felt
His stare intensifies at nothing at all
A hole hollow and numb
Sits frozen over with no signs
Of it starting to melt
As the pain on the other side
Of the door becomes too much to bare
She crumbles and falls
Sobbing echoes and flows
Falling on deaf ears
As she curls up in a ball
Alone in her now destroyed dream
Of the life she thought they would have
And so very alone lying in this hall
a lot of powerful feeling felt through that door, thank you for expressing it swanrose
Thank you for reading!
Much emotion and power in this one….nice write!
Thank you New Veiw and welcome…
heart wrenching
Thanks PD
Sometimes we have to get to the curled-up ball stage to want better for ourselves, almost a cocoon cathartic place. Then….. we let go of what we do not need, and soar.
Good write, swanrose.
Thank you Jannie
Black swan this is truely very true… in fact it happens all the time every moment and has happened to me as to you or those we have caused to feel so…it is excruciatingly poignant… if I did not believe in a God of Love I would assume a world of Satrean melevolence.. and yet the very picture is so full of life and meaning and reassurance. It is just perfect because it is so painful it leaves pain behind and gains a small still space of peace… Ok I’ve had a few wines but its true anyway!! Cheers- a fellow endurer – and fellow believer that to live is better than to hide in painless conformity – vitually but not absolutely..whatever the risk!
lol…All Poets drink right or is that just what I tell myself 🙂 I am really glad you enjoyed it.
Yes and Ive read this one again and stand by my every word although I am as sober as a poetry judge!! (Perish the thought!)
Hey 🙂
FW>>>>From asoulwalker:
I was thinking about getting a group of poets together and having someone pick a topic for all of us to write a poem about. I would then post all the poems on this blog. I think it might be interesting. Now if you are a writer but have not written much poetry (or any) this does not mean that you should not consider it. If anyone is interested leave a comment below.
thanks
Desperation, frustration, disappointment: tough emotions to handle, strongly expressed so very succinctly; nice work…
Thank you Lindy!
As the song says, Underneath my skin. This poem got underneath my skin.
Thanks for reading
i don’t know if I am just too emotional today or if your poetry is to blame but this one tore my heart out. Awesome poetry Swan.
Thank you and I am sorry about that.
Intense, my friend.
Thank you MM
Lots of raw emotion here. Powerful stuff.
Thanks DS
Wow, what a frightening and powerful poem. I got the chills! Excellent, and thank so much for subscribing to my blog.
Your welcome and I am glad you liked it.
Sad and exhausting.
Reminds me of so many passionate lovers’ quarrels. And makes me wonder why we all just can’t get along, what with all this passion banging on the door and running through fields of intensity . . .
But then Life would be too easy for some 🙂 Thanks for reading