(written a very long time ago)
Walking down a darkened street
Looking for love from who I meet
When I saw loneliness in your eyes
We try to talk but we can’t speak
From all the lies and the secrets we keep
If only we could you might be the one
Lost in these feelings
I thought they had died
Lost in these feelings
Buried alive
Now I see that time has passed
And you have gone by
But can’t forget the look
That you had in your eyes
Another day older
As the wind blows colder
Don’t know where I’m going
Don’t care where I’ve been
blackswanpoetry 
Good poem!
sounds like lyrics for a melancholic guitar song :)thanks for sharing.
ummm yeah it was lyrics 🙂
Nicely done. A bit whistful and sad; and, isn’t that the truth that sometimes we do feel buried alive in our feelings. Something we can all relate to.
Tons of twists and turns. Quite brooding. My potluck: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/05/17/outline/
I like it. Very melancholy…dig it.
at times, it is hard to speak when there are too much to say.
lovely entry,
smiles.
🙂
Simple, concise and laden with meaning
Ah! Wonderful Love! Being lost and finding your way, all part of the process called life.
Words coming form the heart! Thanks for sharing!
It really captures your melancholy, beautiful lyrics
I enjoyed this piece! Thank you for sharing.
Good one.. 🙂
Nice melancholic verse!
A fantastic write!
Lost opportunities haunt us and keep us wondering, What if…………..
Very nice. Thank you for sharing.
Ah! It so did hurt! Very powerful emotions flowing there!
love this 🙂
huh.
I kept thinking I could predict what was next, but each time I was surprised.
Intriguing, thought provoking…
Thanks everyone for the comments. It feels good to get appreciation for a piece. 🙂
Loved it!!! 🙂
Powerful descriptions and illustrations of emotions. Very nice poem.
Nice. Simple with a melancholic rhythm. Good job.
Beautifully melancholic poem.
Lovely, swan. Truly notes on the human condition. I particularly like this line: ‘If only we could you might be the one’ and the previous lines, which speak to people’s inability to take a chance and communicate with one another out of fear, or hiding, or lies.
~Ms. Queenly
Good writing. Sad and whimsical. Thanks for the visit to me.
I know what it is like not knowing and NOT CARING where you were and were you´re going… perhaps its better that way.
If this was written a long time ago, I do hope you’ve found more peaceful moments and happier thoughts.
love and peace for you.
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Packed with emotion that was truly felt, I enjoyed reading it.
good lines,written strongly.
Nice, Swan! First actual poem I’ve read by you. Are you the person in this poem? Whoever it was, was not in a good place. Well-written, strongly conveys the feeling of loss and isolation, the passage of time……………….
A very sad song indeed. Well written!
nice…the last two lines settle our feeling swell…after the heart ache in the first part…nicely done..evocative…
You’ve captured that feeling of being lost well. I feel the cold.
The truth and love… lost in each other… great write
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That vacancy walked comes through so well here. A strong write my friend ~ Rose
The power of love…. can be a killer.
love the closure, it works well, doesn’t come over as cliche at all. Greta way to end the piece
This is an intriguing piece. Loved the ending.
Mine’s here:
The Evening Wind
This has a sad aching feel to it… the love is lost, but the feelings are still in there… hope the one finds the way….Nice write!
Very well woven.. sad but definitely expressed very well!
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