Emotions bursting
Like buds in the spring
You ask me now
What does all this mean
Dancing in circles
Feeling everything
All at once
It’s too much
Forcing you to scream
Looking at me
But seeing right through
Your arms outstretched
But I can’t seem to reach you
The sky it falls
And melts into the grass
Strangely beautiful and reassuring
But it is fading and does not last
Clouds rolling by
As fast as a train
You stand there looking up
Your eyes begin to flow
And smear across your face
Letting go of all the pain
Unable to help
I watch with sorrow
Just know I will return
And stand by you again tomorrow
And for all the tomorrows
You will ever see
To be witnessed in one breath
A candle that burns a flame
Just for you
I have kept
On the chance of your
Future happiness
I have not slept
blackswanpoetry 
Wow… so many lines capturing emotions exploding beyond the darkness, burning passions of the flame.
So nice emotional poem!
“The sky it falls
And melts into the grass”
I enjoyed this piece. Love the surreal dreamlike images you created here.
elegant.
I like the line about the sky melting into the grass. That is a great image.
Feelings expressed in sepia tones. I like this!
Rosie
The last line makes this poem so strong. A dreamer returning to a dream? Very surreal qualities.
This one gave me vertigo! But I think that means it was good… *smile*
briliant choice of words..emotional and in depth..
Fabulous imagery in your words depicting emotional pain.
“Your eyes begin to flow
And smear across your face”
Salvador Dali’s painting, “The Resistance To the Persistence of Memory” comes to mind.
Peggy
Awesome! Full of powerful emotion and promise! Nicely done!
The hopefulness at the end is beautiful. What a wonderful commitment of a lover that waits…
Very nice flow and feeling! Nice:)
Just know I will return
And stand by you again tomorrow…how very reassuring that promise sounds. ..Partings need not be painful if there is hope for that tomorrow:-)
Powerful, raw, emotional piece loved this
Wow, I love this! So much emotion and so beautifully expressed. Well done!
recalls moments i can recogonize, tender as dew drops
Romantic and beautiful. Though both would be understatements for this poem. really nice.
cheers!
A lovely well written poem
oh how dark yet lovely! nicely done! well delivered!
Love the emotions expressed. Romance and pain.
you hold a nice emotional line in this not tipping but riding that edge of love and devotion…i hold a candle and have not slept…yeah love will do that to you…thanks for popping in…we dont officially open until tuesday but our OpenLinkNight will kick off then at 3 pm….
Emotional and haunting….
Nice to meet you at d’Verse ~
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there is so much promise in the poem, looking after forever is a firm commitment.
Speaks of unconditional support for a loved one to me, keeping watch over a loved one who is in pain. Interesting read.
Powerful words and emotions expressed. It’s heart wrenching to leave a loved one even if temporary. This piece was very well done.
you’ve put a lot of emotions into this..the clouds like trains..a beautiful image…looking forward to seeing you tomorrow for the opening..
The frustration of unrealised love , an acute awareness of what could have been?
Great poetry, very thought provoking 🙂
Good work.
beautiful
thanks everyone your comments inspire…..
This makes me think of what it means when we change from childhood to the rest of our life.
-William Leed-
nice poem with powerful words… 🙂
powerful, emotional poem. love it!
“A candle that burns a flame”
For some reason this line to me stands above all the rest though i also liked the line about the tomorrows and all the ones after. Over very emotional piece though seems like a roller coaster of writing if you don’t mind me saying. I do the same though so I understand. 😛 over all great piece and another thrilling ride.
thanks I know what you mean. I bascially go on a ride when I write. So it can be all over the place at times. I never know where it is going before it gets there.
Grandness in one long breath…
unconditional love…..it spoke a lot…loved it
Great, says it all…like an endless love affair, unmeasured by words.
thanks 🙂
Ok…Figure while I’m at it might as well check it before my ADHD kicks in! One Breath- Love It.
Your page- You freakin show off. Only if I had the patience…60 mgs of Adderall wasnt enough for me to try and figure this site out so I stuck to the easy one at blogger. But you got great taste my good man!
Before I run off on a tangent…..Main Focus— ONE BREATH
Awesome!
lol thanks…..
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