Melting in front of me
I see your face
What is happening?
My heart starts to race
Take off running
Walls turn to trees
Falling behind me
Keeping up with
Every stride
Frantically looking for
A place to hide
Run off a cliff
Drop like a Stone
Land on my feet
No longer afraid
But all alone
Smoke on the ground
Fire in the Sky
Strangely I do not
Wonder why
I remember your face
And fear you have died
A path unfolds before me
Begging of me to follow
Crossing a river
That’s oh so shallow
Or am I walking on top
I want to look
But I can’t stop
Mesmerized by what’s ahead
What will I find?
A vision of my own birth
Or am I already dead
The earth erupts
Everlasting light engulfing me
It’s all too bright
Nothing I can see
But then it’s gone
As quickly as it came
I feel alright
But I doubt
I’ll ever be the same
(Thanks for reading)
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Wonderfully written . .mystically beautiful. love your poetry.
Thank you Joy! I am really glad you enjoy it.
beautiful poem
Truly dreamlike state in this read, almost an embedded paradox in the lines that stirs you into a perfect moment of “whats real”….wonderfully penned my friend! ~ Rose
Thanks Rose this one is pretty old just thought I would share it.
This really takes me away… Love it !
Awesome I am glad Mr Watson 🙂
Awesome!! 🙂
Thank you Elyas
I like the beginning of this very much, it has all the panic so often associated with a dream. Most effective poem.
Thank you Jamie. I am glad you liked it.
sometimes we can really get lost in our dreams, trying to find ground on whats to come..
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Very true…
The imagery is wonderful .. dreamlike state… and i liked your words…
‘I remember your face
And fear you have died
A path unfolds before me
Begging of me to follow’
Calling to follow… thanks for sharing…
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Thanks Shashi 🙂
“walls turn to trees falling behind me” there is no way to hide from our truth — Wow! This is an amazing write.
Thank you so much Kay! I am glad you think so.
Hello.
WoW! I felt the panic all the way through this.
Awesome imagery!
Thanks for sharing.
Unchain My Heart
Thank you Andy 🙂 Glad you enjoyed it.
Vividly visual and frantic. Very nice write! I love this one!
Thank you Charles
Its perfect! The emotions caught in rushing line breaks are perfect! Love this!
Thanks Kellie
Wonderful, I was carried along with it as though I were there. Lovely well done 🙂
Awesome I am glad you did Jeanie
amazing…
Thank you Morning
I love your poetry and each time I arrive to read I am so happy I have come back time and time again. I do so enjoy reading poetry from all these entries and happy picnic
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That is very nice of you to say. Thank you so much. I am very glad you feel that way.
nice…love those life changing moments…nice flow through out…is it my birth or am i dead already…i paused there to appreciate…
thanks Brian and thank you for reading
I loved it. It just got better with every line
thank you so much
Such moments truly can define one, wonderfully captured in your piece.
Yes they can Pat thank you
Oooh. I shouldn’t have read this so close to bed time. You created an anxious mood, for sure.
lol sorry about that! maybe I should put warnings on them 🙂
masterfully surreal…
Thank you so much Kim.
some of these journeys are over before they really started and still..change everything…great capture..
Thank you claudia and that is so true…
A kind of rhymed apocalyptic vision. The beauty and rhythm of the lines belie the horror within. Well done.
Thank you Gay I appreciate it
it is the little things that seem to cause the most change, isn’t it?
thanks for stopping in Sheila 🙂
really dreamy, love it. written like a dream and evocative of dreams – odd, unknown, uncertain, questions, eerie ….. perfect.
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Thanks Elle I appreciate you…
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Hope your well! ~ Rose
thankl you Rose 🙂 I will as soon as I have time. Very busy right now. thanks again!
Dreams can be so very strange…… I’ve had similar ones, so hard to describe but you did it so well……. I really liked this…. Each line took me deeper into it and the ending is so real, waking up and realizing that this was a unique, and in a way each one does change us a little.
thanks John and I agree they do.
Interesting. Did you consider doing this in third person? Might be even more surreal if the character in the poem is not identified as “I” but as “he” or “she,” I have found by my own experiments. Or even more removed if the narrator says, “I watched him…” Booahhaha!
For whatever it may be worth…
Not really but that would be kinda cool. Thanks for reading Charles
lovely
thanks
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